Distance, Chapter 1 Part 4
Inside the lounge, I couldn’t hear Mom and Dad arguing any more. It was something to be grateful for, at least.
The only other person in the room, an older woman, sat in the middle chair of the first of two rows of seats. She wore a loose, cream-coloured dress, and a gold scarf on her head, both of which complemented the rich, chocolate-brown of her skin. The greyish-teal of the lounge, on the other hand, was considerably less flattering.
I stepped into the second row and sidled over to the far chair. She looked up from her datapad to smile at me as I sat down.
I nodded to her and said, “Hi.”
She seemed to consider my acknowledgement an invitation, and her smile widened. “Good day, young man!” she said, and reached back to offer me her hand. “I am Isoke Nwapa.” Her English was clear, though strongly accented — British, sort of, but clipped, and precise.
I took her hand and shook it, saying, “Um . . . Jason Borden. It’s nice to meet you.” I almost smiled back.
“You are travelling to Eta Cass 2 with your parents?” she said, glancing past me to where Mom and Dad were still arguing.
“Yeah,” I replied. “We’re moving there.”
She looked at me for a few seconds, then twisted around to more directly face me. “You do not seem happy about the prospect.”
I snorted, and glanced to the wall beside me, then back to her. “No. Not really.”
Her smile saddened, and she looked past me again to my parents. She seemed to study them for several seconds before turning back to me. “You were not consulted, I take it?”
“No,” I said. “No I wasn’t.”
She continued to look straight at me, and I was starting to feel uncomfortable. I took the opportunity to shift around, putting my legs up on the seats beside me, and leaned back against the side wall of the lounge. My new position gave me a clear view of my parents, and I was surprised to find it was easier to watch them argue than to meet Isoke’s eyes.
“You will miss your friends, no?” she said.
I laughed. “No,” I said. “That won’t be much of an issue.” Of their own accord, my eyes started shifting back to Isoke, but I managed to convince them to stop when they reached my feet. Friends. What few kids there were on Prime . . . useless Earther brats, every one. They hated Prime, hated Jupiter, and we didn’t get along very well.
There was Sakura. But she’d moved back to Ganymede with her father. I had missed her. A lot, and more than I thought I would. But that had been nearly a year earlier. We had kept in touch, for a while, but a vid conversation, or even a holoprojection . . . it’s just not quite the same thing. I don’t know, maybe it’s just that friendship needs spontaneity, and it’s hard to make that work when you aren’t physically together. Especially when one person has new friends to hang with.
Isoke’s questions weren’t improving my mood, and I sensed she was about to ask another. I decided not to wait. “How ’bout you?” I said, turning back to her, “are you moving there, too?”
She smiled again, and replied, “Yes. My husband and I had always planned to retire to Bermuda, where his family is from. Have you ever been to Bermuda? It is a truly beautiful place. But Charles died a few years ago, and without his pension, I can not afford to live there on my own. Well, an old friend of mine retired to Eta Cass 2, and she loves it, so I decided that I would go there too.”
She hadn’t paused when she’d mentioned her husband’s death, but I felt compelled to say something. “I’m sorry . . . about your husband,” was the best I could come up with.
She smiled, and said, “Thank you, Jason. That is very kind of you. I think you would have liked Charles. He did not have much patience for ” — she glanced at my parents again, then raised her eyebrows mischievously — “certain types of people, either.”
I laughed — I couldn’t help myself.
On the other side of the partition, Mom seemed to be finishing up with whatever little screw she had been turning into Dad. I watched them for a few moments more — until they returned to the check-in counter — then turned back to Isoke.
“Missus Nwapa—”
“Isoke, please,” she corrected. “And Nwapa is my name. Charles insisted I keep it when we married, as my parents had no other children to carry it on.”
I nodded, then continued, “Isoke, do you know anything about this plague we have to get shots for?”
She seemed genuinely surprised by the question. “Your parents . . . they have not discussed even this with you?”
“No,” I replied, and looked over to the counter where they stood talking to the attendant. Dad’s voice carried around the glass partition from that angle, and I could hear him discussing shipping details with her.
“I’m not high on their list of priorities.”
I was aware of several seconds passing, during which I seemed to be staring at Dad’s back. Isoke was the one who broke the silence. “Well . . . ” she said, her voice soft, and sympathetic. I didn’t dare look back to her, just then. “It is nothing to worry about. There is a microscopic organism, native to Eta Cass 2, that acts as a parasite when it enters the human body. The drug is taken once a month and prevents the organism from getting hold. It is completely effective.” She sounded like she was trying to be reassuring.
There was another brief silence. I found my courage, and turned back to her. “What happens if you miss a dose?” I asked.
She shook her head sadly. “That is not so good. It is my understanding that the parasite causes swelling of the brain in most people, and is usually fatal within a few weeks of infection.”
I laughed, though I didn’t find it at all funny. “Great. Take the drugs or die. This plan just gets better and better.”
Isoke reached back and placed her hand on my arm. She smiled at me, but said nothing. I glanced back to my parents, but something in what Isoke had said caught my attention.
“You said ‘most people’. Some people don’t die from it?”
“Yes,” she said, nodding to one side. “Strangely, a few people only get mildly ill when infected. Most of the people who live on Eta Cass 2 are descendents of those original colonists who survived, and they all seem immune. Or so my friend has told me. It is why there is still a colony there, I suppose.”
“Yeah,” I said, “I guess that makes sense.”
A silence followed, during which I stared into the space between my feet. The sound of Dad’s voice droned on, occasionally broken up by higher tones from Mom, or the attendant.
After a while, it occurred to me that I felt tired, more tired than I’d been in a long time, and that all I wanted to do, was to go home.
I looked up, and found that Isoke was still watching me. She had this look on her face, like she wanted to hug me, or something. My first impulse was to feel angry about it — I didn’t want her pity — but I couldn’t quite find the effort, and I think that maybe some part of me was glad, that somebody gave a damn.
She smiled at me, and I smiled back.
Afterword
Dear Reader,
Thanks for reading Distance, Chapter 1! At present, that's all there is. However, after some encouragement from other readers, I've recently come up with a plot for the story, and I plan to pick it up again when Winter Rain is finished. Hopefully, you'll still be interested when I do. :-)
Thanks, as always, for your support.
Chris.
This looks good. SciFi is hard to write, but you pull it off well. Some of your descriptions (like how Isoke looks) feel a little more strained than the rest (which are effortless and smooth), but this is promising to a degree that I mean to look out for what comes next.
It’s funny you say that — this is not the first version of the description of Isoke. The original was scant on detail, more in keeping with the level of description of everything else, but several early readers wanted more. I don’t think I’ve yet been successful in that regard.
Anyway, thanks for reading. Now I just have to write the next chapter.
Sarah has promised to needle me about it until I get it done, so I’m sure it won’t be long.
Write more Distance.
Distance. Write more.
More Distance writing.
I am the only reader that matters!! Hahahahahahaha!
I really hope you continue Distance. When I started reading it I thought it was so-so but by the third part I was really into it. I really like the world building you are doing and want to see want the plant is like.
Hey Gaffer — thanks for your vote.
I’ve been debating for a while just axing the opening section. It was my way in to the story, but it is so different in tone, and, as I think you alluded to, rather weak writing . . . maybe the story would work better without it. And I think that confusion of tone is one of the problems I’ve had figuring out where to go next.
What do you think — would it have it have worked better for you if it just started at part 2? Thanks!
keep going! but because I’m more of a werwolf fan, I think that Winter Rain takes priority. lol
I wouldn’t scrap this part altogether. if you do decide that you don’t like it as the opening to the story, I’d say keep it on as a flashback or something. I do like it though.
Hi ShadowKat — Thanks for your comment.
Don’t worry — if I do pick up Distance again, it will be once a week, at most.
And it’s just the very opening section (the backstory) that I’m considering cutting — not all of this chapter. I think parts 2-4 work as well as I can make them. Just part 1 doesn’t seem to fit that well.
Very much enjoy what there is of Distance. Am looking forward to more, eventually. Am aware though, that everybody has finite reserves of time and energy. Therefore won’t be tragically disappointed if eventually takes a good long while.
Good to know. I still haven’t come up with much, but at least I’m thinking about it again. Thanks for commenting!
I would very much like to see more of this tale as well. But as others have said, if I have to wait a long time, well . . . I’m patient!
Thanks Khamsin.
i don’t like sci-fi. something about space travel and lasery things puts me off. sci-fi writers (well, the ones who have scarred me for life at least) tend to immediately go way over my head with tech-talk and latin names, blithely anticipating me to either follow their whizzing around or go on a frenzied google search for weird non-existent things. i’m too old to do that anymore . . .
here, you do none of that and i am grateful. i can immediately identify with this kid who sees the world around him in plain language – just as we view our own world. and it ends just as i was getting comfortable
what is this strange disease on what is apparently a paradise planet? is it as much a paradise as is advertised? what makes some people survive? what would happen if the drug suddenly became unavailable? would his parents try change everything there with money? could his mother’s indiscretion cause further trouble along the way – something even their double pay can’t make disappear? hmmm . . . i definitely want to know much more . . .
I have asked Gail to do some artwork for Distance, in hopes it will spur me to start writing it again. I actually have answers to most of those questions, if I can just find the courage to write the damned thing.
Thanks for reading and commenting.
courage . . . and if anyone’s artwork can inspire it, gail’s probably will
Distance is about growing up, making friends, crushes, high school. Trust me, courage is required.
well, i agree with the others. Distance is not something to toss off. Build upon it. But come back with a clearer focus perhaps. You set up the story marvelously, mother, father, son, sort of family vacation narrative in the scifi genre. Now what will be the main character’s main dilemma. I think that is the question. Then you will be able to recast the whole story around that theme. Right now you have a lot of elements, a lot to juggle, and you’re doing a great job setting things up—but the dialogue doesn’t hold my attention enough yet. Here’s an idea you might want to try . . . write the ending first and work backwards. Figure out what’s going to happen on this planet and what you’re main character will ultimately be faced with and create those final scenes. Then work back. Just an idea. Keep up the excellent work.
That’s an interesting idea. I kind of had toyed with the idea before, but couldn’t pick an ending. Perhaps it is time I do so, and see what happens.
Thanks, as always, for taking the time to comment!
If you write the ending, I’ll read it! I’m looking forward to seeing what comes of this . . .
When I got to ‘afterword’ portion of this page, my first thoughts were ‘Nooooo. need Mooooreeee!!’
It’s a good start, chapter 1, and well.. I’m really looking forward to the rest of the story!
The good news is I finally have a plot for it. I probably won’t be starting it until Winter Rain is finished, but I think I actually will be starting it.
that’s fantastic news!
Yes, work on it. It reads well. There’s a good setup and a good sense of the characters, though I think you need to develop them, make them a little less typical.